tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22560219.post1734687583296193427..comments2023-12-07T20:31:28.197-05:00Comments on Islands of Joy: #3DNC: Sørina's first chapterSørina Higginshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10907200327850346539noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22560219.post-47520806986260824202013-09-11T12:00:08.092-05:002013-09-11T12:00:08.092-05:00Rosie: Yes, I have founded the character's psy...Rosie: Yes, I have founded the character's psychology and personality on my own, simply to have a base to build from. She grows less and less like me as she develops as a character and begins to make up her own mind about what to do. Also, I have exaggerated my most negative character traits (I hope) and made her younger in order to emphasize generational angst. Sørina Higginshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10907200327850346539noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22560219.post-38582594524844137482013-09-10T03:39:00.154-05:002013-09-10T03:39:00.154-05:00A couple of minor editorial suggestions:
* redding...A couple of minor editorial suggestions:<br />* redding – no such word; it’s "reddening" (you had it correctly a couple of paragraphs later)<br />* now-a-days – it’s not hyphenated; the word is "nowadays"<br />* I started through the computer screen - did you mean "stared"?<br /><br />Otherwise, some more general comments: I found the genre to be more memoir than novel, even if the episode with Jennifer is entirely fictional (but I know you well enough to know it's at least partially autobiographical). The dialogue section is really spicy and moves along well, but whenever you go into that self-reflective mode it doesn't feel like fiction anymore.<br /><br />In fact, your very words in the second half could just as easily describe your piece as they do the blog post:<br /><br />"I loved this combination of the philosophical with the personal. It was quite beautiful writing.... I wonder why she thought it was fiction?"<br /><br />Or maybe that was intentionally self-referential?<br /><br />Finally, it feels disjointed, like a "gallimaufry" of sorts. Maybe yet another intentional self-referential twist?Rosie Pererahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09554035581795923555noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22560219.post-35626768907574857652013-09-09T13:04:20.635-05:002013-09-09T13:04:20.635-05:00Ah, you anticipate me! That's actually really ...Ah, you anticipate me! That's actually really kind of the point of my book: that we have so many more, and the oppressive authorities in this story don't realize that. Thanks for the spoilers.... :) Sørina Higginshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10907200327850346539noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22560219.post-79064383284360532242013-09-09T13:02:45.255-05:002013-09-09T13:02:45.255-05:00also, not to criticize by any means, but psycholog...also, not to criticize by any means, but psychologists generally accept the existence of at least 9 senses, possibly as many as 21+<br /><br />http://www.todayifoundout.com/index.php/2010/07/humans-have-a-lot-more-than-five-senses/<br /><br />http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sense<br /><br />I'm sure you have your hands full with just 5 senses, but the remaining senses might be fun to play around with if there's ever to be a sequalD. J. Lazarushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11831174136563275262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22560219.post-53068156596994913982013-09-09T12:25:14.488-05:002013-09-09T12:25:14.488-05:00Thanks very much for this comment; it's brilli...Thanks very much for this comment; it's brilliant! I think that perhaps his loss of hearing also affects his memory of sounds, because (it will turn out later) nothing has been done to his EARS; something's been done to his BRAIN to prevent him processing sounds. But he's also going to have a long meditation later about the imagination's power to re-create or even create sounds in the mind, so I'll have to work on that a bit more. Many thanks! Sørina Higginshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10907200327850346539noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22560219.post-17738388561039371352013-09-09T09:37:36.765-05:002013-09-09T09:37:36.765-05:00technical question about the blogger's loss of...technical question about the blogger's loss of hearing: does he/she still have memories involving sounds, or has his inability to hear NEW sounds also somehow resulted in a loss of memory for how things sounded? if they still have their memory of sounds, I imagine it would be much more bearable, as their mind would simply fill in the proper sounds when playing a well-rehearsed piece of music, seeing two mugs clink together, etc. The mind is a wonderful fabricator of these things, filling in gaps of missing sensory information (for example, filling in the blind gap existing in our eyes with generated information)D. J. Lazarushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11831174136563275262noreply@blogger.com